Re-Writing

Dear Fellow Journalers,

I knew I had to advance the plot in keeping with the timeline I had set up. The problem was that I  had no idea how to do it. Then one weekend, I happened upon a BookTv program. The author was talking about my very problem! He solved his dilemma by mentioning the season in the first paragraph of each chapter. I was reminded of the movie “Notting Hill” where the main character walked through a familiar place in rain, next shot -snow; next shot – springtime flowers; next shot- falling leaves.

Instead of taking the whole story apart, I took one chapter at a time, making sure to number them to agree with the outline. I advanced my timeline by describing the actions of the characters. One of the things that helped was I put the month on the chapter.

I took my time, proof-reading at night, spell checking at the end of each chapter. At first, doing the ‘re-write I would discard passages then delete them but as I stretched the Story, I began to save the passages for future stories.

I was also mindful of the time period I was writing about. Not being familiar with the 1870-1880’s western USA I skimmed things on the internet about travel time for mail, passengers, medicine, illnesses, food preparation etc. I started a new section called Research. I also subscribed to a western magazine.

I found out that I was using the term “he said” way to much, so I found more action verbs:

  • He mumbled
  • He spoke gently
  • He whispered
  • He grumbled
  • Putting his hands on his hips, he took a stand, saying forcefully
  • He snapped
  • He howled
  • He grunted
  • He whined
  • He questioned
  • He hissed
  • He complained
  • He replied
  • He stated
  • He argued
  • He interrupted
  • He moaned

And instead of repeating ” he stood”:

  • He jumped
  • He snapped up, to attention
  • He struggled upward
  • He eased himself down
  • He drew himself up to his full height

Oh and one day, while playing with a “character conversation” I found my title:

The Reluctant Imposter

 

~Sallie

Character Development

Dear Fellow Journalers,

“The Story” still had no title, which bothered me. At odd times during the day I would find myself adding to the storyline.  Descriptive phrases, scenery, conversations between characters roamed through my mind like lost horses trying to find their way home. Finally, I just decided to write a first draft so that I would have something concrete to work on. At first it seemed odd to me to have what was once in my brain on paper and although it filled up the blank pages, I wondered if I captured what was in my thoughts.

After I finished writing the first two chapters, which was, I admit, fairly easy, I left the whole thing on my computer for a day or two. The process was like waiting for dough to rise – New thoughts kept me up at night. I decided to read “the story” out loud to see if I could help it along. What a shock! My characters were flatter than pancakes!  The characters, as portrayed by actors, were well known by any viewer of the tv show, but two of them in my Story were older than portrayed. So I began to question myself how do I show their feelings? My other problem was that I was writing about men in the 1870’s. A good friend of mine gave me some really good advice ” men have the same feelings as women, they just express them differently.”

I naively thought that I could devote one page for each character but that was not the case. So my question was how do I show emotions and feelings? In real life, it’s pretty easy to tell if a person is excited or nervous. You know from what they say, how they say it, body language and actions. I ended up with a type of questionnaire for each character displaying various actions and thoughts. Here are some of them:

  • He rubbed the back of his neck in frustration
  • He snapped
  • His voice strangled in his throat
  • He felt slightly nervous
  • He was angry
  • He felt guilty
  • He grimaced
  • He kicked the chair leg
  • He tossed and turned in his bed
  • Drinking did not help
  • Drinking fueled his anger so much that he smashed his fist into the wall
  • He sank to his knees and cried
  • He raised an eyebrow
  • He listened with his whole body
  • He gave him a short side-glance
  • His eyes looked past me
  • His eyes studied the floor
  • His voice trailed off
  • He let out a long breath
  • He offered up a flat smile
  • His hands shook
  • He squinted
  • He gave them a measured look
  • He glanced
  • He surveyed the street
  • He dragged his feet
  • He crawled across the ground
  • He strolled
  • He hurled his trembling body

 

The story was going to be about friendship, brotherhood, family, despair, hope and faith. Two of the characters would grow up; one would face his inner demons and all of the family would emerge from their ordeal better men. After I started to “flesh out” my characters, I read the first two chapters to a friend who hated it! “Too disconnected – start again”! I was totally disappointed that they felt that way and almost gave up. But a little voice told me to continue and so I did.

Next week – ‘re-writing and the title revealed!

~Sallie

Creative Writing Journal

Dear Fellow Journalers,

As most readers to this blog can attest, I was a tomboy growing up. I climbed trees, rode horses, played baseball, watched tv westerners (Bonanza, being my favorite show), and had a newspaper route each summer. I also read and dabbled in crafts.While most of my girlfriends were learning the latest dance moves, I was learning Irish Step Dancing.

Recently, while cleaning out a drawer I found my creative writing journal from college.There were sections for descriptive writings, poetry, Story starters, and quotes from books.

About a year and a half ago, I discovered a tv show called Laramie. It had originally aired 1959-1963 but I had never seen it. Well , being that I was retired, I soon started watching it every day. I was drawn to the characters and plots. While surfing the internet for more information on the show, I found a site called fan fiction, which I never knew existed. The writers, people just like us, write “missing scenes” or entirely new stories about tv shows, books, movies, cartoons, plays or movies.

Back in January of 2020, an idea began to take hold and I bought a 5 subject notebook to write out my “Story”. I started by dividing my sections into character development, New characters, main and sub plots, snippets of conversation and finally research. I wrote out the first draft and then let it alone for awhile as I contemplated whether or not to submit it.I am not a professional writer; I write a blog. Doubts followed me around for a few weeks.  Then I ‘re-wrote the first chapter and got stuck.

  1.  I needed to write an outline and stick to it. The last time I wrote a timeline was in college!
  2. How would I advance the story?
  3. What was the best way to describe a scene?
  4. How much emotion to write?
  5. If I submitted it, how would I react to negative comments?

And on and on…

In the following weeks I will share my progress and maybe you can start your own creative writing journal too.

 

~Sallie

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